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traveller

by Able
The comic is a multi-world story following the main character, Able, as he is pulled into different worlds. Able’s task is to find the reason why he has been pulled to the world, and fix it, in order to be pulled back out again. The most common reason would be due to an evil villain, who is trying to destroy the world he was pulled into.
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The comic is a multi-world story following the main character, Able, as he is pulled into different worlds. Able’s task is to find the reason why he has been pulled to the world, and fix it, in order to be pulled back out again. The most common reason would be due to an evil villain, who is trying to destroy the world he was pulled into.

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Guest
October 23rd, 2013
@Guest: and why are none of the buildings marked?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
@Guest: I have another question: Why doesn't the bulletin board use more of your made up language? This seems like a good place to reinforce the written language that you used on the sign at the blacksmith. It could also be used on shopkeeper signs and such, rather than it being in one location for no apparent reason. If you're going to have a fictional language in your setting, reinforce and reuse, don't just use once as a set piece and forget about it!
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
So he has his rusty sword again? Was he just highlandering with it earlier?

Well, before you continue with the next story, invest in a few proofreaders, preferably one who is also an artist to help you arrange art pieces on your pages, like speech bubbles, for maximum impact.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
Why is this in line with the comic, instead of in a section of the site for fan art if this is a teaser made by a fan? It breaks the narrative flow.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
That is a big crowd. A big, uncolored crowd. Perhaps color could be added so it doesn't appear as a field of gray? also, ears and other points to those in the back, because they /are/ anthros, right? dogs and cats and bulls and all manner of pointy things.

Also, since this is the major trading post in neutral land, how can one guy just come in and say, essentially "lol, ours now"? usually they'd have to have bargaining power over the existing kingdom to annex, or be trading something equally valuable. Since this is about the most valuable thing in the world, they'd better have a pretty good reason for just saying Mine and trying to stick a new flag in it, and a contingency plan for when doing that invariably fails.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
Where did the pink thing come from? Is that the narrator back again? Why did his eyes turn yellow, and why does he not acknowledge the strangeness of what just happened? Is he possessed? Also, why is Able's name not capitalized?

Formatically speaking, breaking up "They need you able" and "go" into two seperate bubbles would get the same message across, but would probably look better on the page, and have more impact than using an ellipsis.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
Gosh. This town sounds pretty cool, but then, why is it not the seat of the neutral kingdom? this seems like probably the best place to set up shop if I were a lord of some kind. Also, the shopkeeper's dialogue is varying in formality, switching from the informal "Yeah, it's an important" to the more formal "It's the first I have seen" rather than "It's the first I've seen".

Visually speaking, it might be better to have the rabbles overlapping to suggest chaos in volume and word, so that it's not so easily readable, suggesting the pandemonium that rabbles bring with them.

Also, despite the rabble and angry mob, Able is able to just walk up to one and casually ask "Oh hey guys, what's going on" rather than just following the loud mob to their location?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
you would think that, made of rare ores by specialized forging mages, that these weapons would be rare, not in the hands of traders, bandits, and most of the world.

Also, proofreading. "So much gold was coming in, bringing with it ways to lose that gold." for example...
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
The shopkeeper doesn't think it's a little strange that he's kind of lost at the ass end of the world, and that he's in one of the largest trading hubs in the world, known for selling magic-imbued weapons? Also, what makes the better than forged steel, or whatever weapons are used from wherever*(whenever) Able came from?

Also, where did the rusty sword go? and where did that map come from?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
I feel like I am missing out on a lot of context and/or back history.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
Why is the hereto unnamed protagonist (who I assume is Able) a dick to the shopkeeper? What was the shopkeeper kidding about? Why does Able go back to the shopkeeper after passing? Also, your inconsistent punctuation rears its ugly head again, especially with Kine's introduction.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
Is that a glass storefront on the end there?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
If swords don't exist where he's from, why did he take it with him? What does that achieve?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
What day and age is it? Is it so strange that there would be a weapon manufacturer? Why are the tools primitive? What sort of tools are used nowadays?

Also, the dialogue could stand to be broken up a bit, especially that last bubble on the bottom. There are 2-3 sentences there with only a question mark and no capitals to distinguish a new thought. For readability, break this into three bubbles or add punctuation.
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
The caps are a little inconsistent. Invest in a proofreader.

Also, what language is that? Is it the native tongue of the land?
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
why introduce a narrator if you're going to do away with it on the second page? Just for the purpose of having an exposition fairy explain why there is an anthro fox in a field? the narrator should provide a little more context before poofing away...
Guest
October 22nd, 2013
What is unbalanced here? Who is making these drops? More importantly, who is the narrator?
Maiomaio (Guest)
October 21st, 2013
interesting
interesting so far i will be interested to see how this plays out and what the next place will be like after this. i can not wait for more. :3
Able
October 21st, 2013
the cover of a future book to end the project time for uni please comment bellow ... really i need comment to pass my class anything tell em what you feel about the comic
Able
September 30th, 2013
sorry i have really been unable to draw of late so he's a filler for a teaser for a future story in the series

art by my friend DracoJeff check out his work @ http://www.furaffinity.net/user/dracojeff/