Monsters

by Valik Sparks
"Monsters" is the story of a too-curious-for-his-own-good high school student, whose world is turned upside down when he learns that not all tall tales are as tall as he once thought, and the myths, rumors, and urban legends that surround him may hold more truth than he bargained for.

Not all things that creep and crawl in the night can be sundered by merely a boot, and the flick of a light.


Here there be Monsters.

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"Monsters" is the story of a too-curious-for-his-own-good high school student, whose world is turned upside down when he learns that not all tall tales are as tall as he once thought, and the myths, rumors, and urban legends that surround him may hold more truth than he bargained for.

Not all things that creep and crawl in the night can be sundered by merely a boot, and the flick of a light.


Here there be Monsters.

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...yeah, it's pretty suspicious.

But could you really say no to that face?
Yaaaay Kira's creepy side! Interested to see where that goes. I reeeally liked the last frame there, I think it captured that animalistic I'm-gonna-eat-you ferocity quite well.
@dear2me: Oh thank you! I'm very happy to hear this! :D
dear2me
December 28th, 2013
I really like this story and I just love Kira. She's cool.
That moment when you realize your new friend almost tried to...

...eat you?
Bear beats human. Spider beats bear. Human beats...

...no, human just dies.
@TheArtfulJellyfish: Thank yooouuu! That's great to hear :D
If you can't believe it worked...

...it probably didn't.
A cruel mistress indeed. XD

On the technical side, nice page-flow! Absolutely 100% confusing stuff free. On the more readerly side, I like the kind of innocent remark at the beginning about the webs being there to mark her territory, because... we just saw her use them to catch and devour an adorable harmless deer. And Alex is so clueless. XD
Chandler: 1

Alex: Dead
@Valik Sparks: Hehe, well, glad to hear that always letting you know's a positive thing and not annoying and overly critical. XD
@TheArtfulJellyfish: Yeeeaaahh I had trouble with bubbles in this page >.< Tried my best; panel 6 in particular, I kind of imagined them all almost talking at the same time anyways XD. At least the lower part of the panel. But don't want it to be distracting. Thanks for always letting me know XD.
@TheArtfulJellyfish: Oh yay! I'm glad that you've been getting those vibes cause that's definitely what I'm going for XD.

And yes, sadly not all amusing references can be gotten by all the people. But I do want to keep working on ways to have the characters almost explain the references themselves.. I dunno, comedic writing is an art in itself. Must practice.
Lol! Alex's face in panel 7. And Lylah in panel 6. And Lylah in panel 8. And Lylah in panel 11. And just... Lylah. XD

My only complaint is the speech bubble order has, yet again, become... *bows head sorrowfully* confusing. Just a little bit in 3 and 4, and then rather a lot in six. Your page-flow has been getting a lot better, just occaaasionally stuff like this happens that makes me stop and go, "Whaaat?" And I don't want to stop and go "what," I want to stop and go, "OMAGOSH LYLAH'S FREAKING ADORABLE!" Because she is! So... much... enthusiasm... So... many... exclamation marks...
Wheeeee I've been excited to upload this page. It was a lot of fun. Lylah was a character who wasn't in my original story outline, but I came up with later (and tied her into some important future plot points), and I'm really happy with her. I like quirky/adorable little-sister relationships a lot.

The only sad thing is that she won't be in any more pages this Chapter. Sob.
Yaaaay, quirky interesting friends! I like that you've given them some distinct voices. Chandler seems to have this kind of sarcastic tone, even if he's not being directly sarcastic, and Cassie seems more friendly and upbeat.
I'm going to assume that bit about Desperate Housewives would be funnier if I knew the show, but as it is I was at least a little amused, if not just by the blank stares and the massive wall of text that followed. XD
@TheArtfulJellyfish: Thank yoouu! Eheheh I'm glad you like the random Kira sillyness XD. And you definitely have a point with the dialogue. Could've scripted that better.

Next time!
Keeping secrets can be bad for your friendships!


And Desperate Housewives is just bad for your mental health altogether.
Panel five was the best panel. Period. Absolutely necessary. XD Loling so hard...
I also really like the fourth frame. It's interesting, how it's kind of a double-panel, and the dialogue crosses over the divider. Interesting.
My only complaint about this page, though, is the vagueness of Alex's question. It seemed a little unnatural that the teacher would have any idea what, "what do spiders like" means, let alone be able to provide the exact answer Alex was looking for. I kinda scratched my head at that, though it's minor enough that it doesn't really matter, and the picture of Kira with an umbrella more than makes up for it. Also your eccentric-looking science teacher looks quite eccentric. Nice touch. XD
Yes, Panel 5 is completely unnecessary and wasn't even in the script. I was just having too much fun XD.