13(critique)

[sonny chiba37]

One of my favourite pics tell me what you think (Can you guess the name on the side of the box)


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[Sonic-ock]

First off, awesome screen name! The puberty illustration is great,The look of shock on the boy's face is superb.My major criticism involves his right(our left hand). Firstly, the hand and wrist don't seem to be connected to the arm right, you could fix this by angling the wrist to point the same direction as the forearm. Also the way his right hand is gripping the box looks a bit awkard. The oposite hand looks fine, with the palm on the side of the box and his fingers wrapped around the front, but with his right hand it looks like the palm is closer to the front with his fingers digging into the box. It would look less awkward if you had his right hand holding the box more like his left hand is, with the palm on the side and the fingers wrapped around the front. Keep up the good work.

[sonny chiba37]

good suggestions and you're right about the hand I going to have work on that

[blackmoongirl2424]

Very awesome work! It shows main issues some face when entering teenagehood. Pretty much all I have to say besides the hands already disscussed above would be the sleeves have them hang on the arms they look stiff and there have been times I've done that it it looks akward XD; Other than that keep up the good work ;P

[sonny chiba37]

thanks for the love

[stripedwine]

My only criticisms would be that the shadows seem haphazardly, even randomly, placed. Many places where I would think would be a shadow is completely flat, and also do away with the textures. They're very distracting. Also, there's something weird going on with the eyes that doesn't sit right with me.

But aside from that, I have some suggestions:

I would change up the composition and angle. Also, maybe go for some stranger, simpler, and perhaps even less saturated colors on the boy so that the stuff that's coming out of the box stands out. (I love the harsh lighting though.) Maybe something like this?



Oh and just one more thing: the jpeg artifacts. D:

[sonny chiba37]

I'M going to give that shot and see what I can make out of the thumbnail, thanks

[sonny chiba37]

More art for reveiw

enjoy

[sonny chiba37]

A pen and ink pic