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Meleeman
I like drawing, video games, anime, i'm a Furry, I work a dead end job washing dishes and i'm a college student studying 3-d animation?
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doin better than me as far as the buffer goes. lol
i like dem backgrounds bruh.
those backgrounds were a nice change to be honest. but i think in this specific situation, we should be more focused on the characters and their emotions. In dramas I like having backgrounds for establishing setting in a page. after that i'm okay with just the characters and their dialogue, if thats what's important in the scene. i can tell that chris is angry. but i have trouble pinning down Maiko chan's emotions. i can't tell whether she is genuinely concerned, faking it, afraid of losing her. no shock from her lover leaving just like that. no feelings of helpless as someone would feel if they left like that. Maybe Maiko doesn't understand the gravity of the situation, but i still think it warrants more expression from her as a character. now chris you use body language which is good, her expressions are more varied and differen't, Maiko responds in kind being mildly confused, to just uneasy as I see it. we should see more of how uneasy she is in the previous pages, a sweat drop, a heart pound, a tremble, a slight shrinking of the iris, otherwise i'm kinda wondering if Maiko cares at all. some of the expressions in this page also confuse me. chris's reaction to Maiko in page 2. does this show her amazement to Maiko's lack of awareness or about how much she seems to care about her? the third panel i get the idea, but it would be nice if the hand looked more like it was reaching out to her. and it would be enhanced if we could visibly see Chris swivel her body away from Maiko (such as lines indicating movement for example), thus further communicating her distaste of her or her actions.

the 2nd to last panel i think is an "OH SHIT what the fuck have I done" face, but it looks too mild for the situation. the ending panel is nice. but i also think you could employ more varied camera angles to emphasize the events. for example, the middle panel could be slight above shot like you have it, but instead of having the focus in the empty space, bring the camera around so that the 7/8 view of Maiko is closer to us the reader, and focus is on Chris leaving maiko. this would also help emphasize chris's solidarity in her actions, and the helplessness and futility of Maiko's "Chris wait." with the focus being on the back of chris's head, with her body moving swiftly away from us...

that was pretty specific. I do hope you take my unwarrented criticism well. i do like your comic and I wish it the best.
prove her wrong maiko.
ooooohhh damn!
Damn.
Real shit man. i get attached to lies and the liars so much. even though I know they are lying.
Meleeman
September 3rd, 2017
and now we see the whistlehops true intentions.
illegal.
on the reasons why something is bad, saying it's illegal is pretty much like saying "because everyone thinks/says so." i find this line reasoning not morally justifiable. it would be better to say that taking advantage of a child who cannot reproduce or give proper consent, this could lead to benni saying "but I did consent, there was no coercion involved in some cases." which then you could bring up the risks of having unprotected sex even as a minor, which he doesn't understand, therefore it is evident he had been taken advantage of, and had not fully understood the consequences of his actions.
I actually agree with benny somewhat on kits on kits but it's a recipe for disaster once they hit their teenage years, and they only way they are capable knowing is books or other adults or adult media. it's not inherently wrong its just a bad idea.
I remember dis discussion. the classic bad touch.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
i literally don't know what to think right now. not sure if I should be disgusted, amazed, or just fascinated... I think bewildered is the proper term. Campion what goes on in that strange head of yours I love it.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
OH man. you can't be serious.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
oh god. this just feels exactly like a satire of feminism.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
Man I love this comic. story is wonderful. and inpires me to make something similar.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
OMFG. that last panel.
Yes caleb. yes I did XD XD
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
ooooo she tryin!
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
damn. what a badass. though i'm surprised he's alive though. shouldn't he be dead after killing 3 officers?
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
if not he's a damn good one at least.
oh man. well. now I know the importance of teaching children consent. i think parents find this idea weird, but i think situations like this would be avoided, or at least a bit more clear cut. honestly as I child I've been on the dealing and receiving end of this.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
...
Goddamn I can't tell which person is the sociopath.
Meleeman
September 2nd, 2017
shit. Real stuff.
damn this reminds me of when my mother would do this shit to me if I said anything to my dad. this is just. too real man. glad I stood up to that bitch when i did but boy was it hard.