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Aw it should be time for 'The End is Nigh' series II.
Did you think you were going to get away without an end chapter review? Well tough, cause here goes.

First of all, Maxie is crazy fun. He was a great way to remind us all how good this comic can be. I especially liked how his whole 'what do you think this is, a video game' speech was emphasised by the other characters (bar DJ) acting particularly videogamey. Tyton's face was certainly mirroring Ash in one panel, just after Haun put out the water, and Ted was total NPC in the way he sent Tyton up to the summit to deal with the rest of team Magma (unless of course he's a double agent.)

I also think I mentioned that I didn't see a way for the plotline to end in a satisfying way, but you completely surprised me with the Ted thing, and I like where we're at at the moment. I also really liked DJ's little bit. Given that this comic is moving away from the rigid in-game plot, I think DJ's probably in a unique position for you to treat completely as you want, since she wasn't on the team in-game. Plus, she's now been way more competent than Tyton against both Maxie and Archie.

A problem I did have, was that there were lots of what could be called throwaway pages in this chapter, like the last couple, the thunk page, or the one right after the thunk page, which could have all been combined with other pages. I hope you realise I'm not trying to accuse you of being lazy, since I know you put lots of work into this comic, but I feel like with this sort of update schedule the pace of the comic is badly affected by these pages. I'd much rather have some of these pages combined, and shorter chapters, even if it meant longer breaks between chapters.

Anyway, thanks very much for the great chapter, which managed to have a real sense of danger, make honest and insightful commentary on the games, and still be very funny in places (UNFIRE!!) Maxie's speech was really well written in places too (...they're crazy!) I really enjoyed having this comic back for a while, and I'm sure I'll enjoy it again when it returns. Best of luck with your trip, and also woo Buffy! Have you got to Once More With Feeling yet?
Yay, DJ's back! I'm a bit worried for her though, given the chapter title.

I've sent you an email with some critiques on the Delay, but I don't know if there's a place you'd rather I put them, like in response to that news post, so let me know.

Also, I may change my avatar. Hope that won't blow too many minds.
I'm struggling to thing of a satisfying way for this to end other than Maxie murdering the team, and I can't think of much. Other than Tyton straight up killing him.
How is that knife standing up?! Which part of Tyton's face is it lodged in?

Sorry for missing the grand return of this comic, I was out of the country for a couple of weeks, but I'm super glad it's back! And howdy to all my old buddies in the comments, I hope you've all been well.

Maxie, I mean your Maxie, is exactly the sort of villain a pokemon comic needs. Sure, he's mad, but more importantly, everything he's saying is true. It feels like it's going to take a genuine challenge for Tyton to make any headway against him, or even just survive him, rather than just relying on brute force. Mind you, I'm not sure I entirely agree with Maxie's comment on this page. As dangerous as knifes are, I doubt he could handle a flamethrower to the face. Still, a really good line.

Can't wait to read on!
I'd be really interested to see what sort of a world you could come up with for an original CYOA comic, it sounds like loads of fun. While CYOA aspects would be nice, it also seems to me like it would be good for you to have a pretty clear idea of how events not directly affected by the main character (the one we can control)'s actions would play out, otherwise you could end up writing yourself into a corner or something.
@Pokemontrainergigi: I got it this morning :P Are you planning on getting it at some point? So far it's pretty dang cool.
Ooh, I'd forgotten that I liked Maxie so much. Although only a day in-comic, Maxie's been gone for quite a while from our point of view, so nice decision to bring him back with a bang.
Ooh that effect is very pretty! I'm not sure how relevant it is though. Its a shame we don't have Karamia around any more for her pretty skull designs.
I do hope Haun starts commenting again soon, it seems odd that all the mewsletters and hogwarts things haven't come back.
Well, I did suggest way back on page 98 that the Grovyle in this game would be a descendent of Gingko, just sayin'.
@Pokemontrainergigi: Honestly, I think that looks loads better! Nice you kept it simple though, since the image is pretty complex and it would get quite confusing with stuff going on in the background as well.

Oh by the way, I hope you don't mind me asking, since it's completely unrelated to the comic, but does anyone here play Animal Crossing New Leaf, cause I've just got it, and its pretty darn awesome, so I'd recommend it to anyone who wants something relaxing to play!
@Miles Hikari: Remember that he could have set these pages up weeks ago to appear to us now, but comments I think he would have to do live, so maybe he's gone on holiday or something and he'll be back in a few days. Even so, I hope Haun's OK, he was a bit disheartened last time we heard from him. I think some new XY news is emerging tomorrow, so that will lure him out.

I'm interested to see where this is going, I've seen lots of ghost/memeory/hallucinations of dead friends in various fictions, so I'm interested to see how you're going to do something different to all of them.
I'm loving this page, it's really creative, but I can't really say that I like the transparent background thing, because I'm not really sure this page fits the tone of the rest of the comic. I'm not sure how to make my point, but, like, all the other pages would easily be bound together to make a nice little comic book (well not that little actually), but I'm not sure what you would do with this page?

By the way, sorry for not commenting more recently, but I'm loving the way you're adding to the games plot with the whole Kara thing, plus I like that her full name is Karamia, because honestly the OCD in me was annoyed at how close Kara is to Kiara. A shame that we can't see pretty skull designs with all this ugly grey though...
YAYY
Hope you're feeling better by now!
@Safe: Actually, it would be spelt wrong if it was French, but 'mi amor' is Spanish for 'my love'.
@Pokemontrainergigi: Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against purple, in fact, it's my favourite colour. I think it's the dots around the eyes which I don't like so much, it makes her look like one of those cartoon characters with massive eyelashes.
Ooooh! Kara's patterns are going to change every time we see her aren't they. Of course, by every time we see her, I mean days in comic I suppose. I think I preferred the pattern in the last chapter, the new one makes her look too pretty, and not crazy enough, but that's just my opinion.
I'm hoping that we're not going to have too long a mourning period, or at least, it will be more melancholy than bleak, I don't really want to see Ty considering quitting again, although it might be realistic to consider skipping Mt. Chimney.

By the way, did you not say that you had a proposition for me at the end of the last chapter regarding the reviews?
Wow. It really, definitely did work.

From the start, it was great that the darker tone continued, and it certainly was more consistent than the last chapter. This was, I think, the first chapter with virtually no lighter touches, which really suits the first chapter in which a team member has died since you really got into characterization.

But first, we got introduced to a brilliant new villain, Maxie. I'm quite impressed if you came up with his personality on the spot, because although it seems a bit joker like, it also has some original touches. I especially liked the wording of "IT MAKES YOU WRONG!", and the lead up to that. Also, the facial expression of Maxie in that panel was spot on, probably the most effective in the comic so far. In addition to this, Maxie made a really good point, in that the villains always seem obligated to fight you, and give up if they lose, and even fight you in standard format, rather than just, say, attacking the trainer all at once. Thankfully, Maxie has been established as sufficiently insane to say all of that and believe it, and still fight properly with Ty on Mount Chimney. After this, Archie will have a lot of catching up to do in the villain stakes, although, I sort of feel that the conversation with Scott implied that Archie and Scott were manipulating Maxie, but I can't say for certain. Speaking of Scott, it's interesting that he's turned out to be a villain, but I can't say he feels particularly threatening at the moment. I assume though the next chapter will be on Mt. Chimney, so we'll get to see his plan, and maybe some motivations, so that will be fun.

Okay, onto the last couple of pages. To be honest, I didn't really see it coming, but that was probably me just deluding myself that they would both live. Just for fun, here's a quote from my first ever comment:

"I have to admit, I'm not a big fan of Chester, he really gets on my nerves, a bit like Gerald did at the start, but he has not started to grow on me yet. I'm aware that he's meant to be annoying, and I like how he's like the epitome of annoying teenagers at the moment, but he just doesn't seem to work for me. "

At the start, I really didn't like Chester, he really annoyed me, and for some reason, it irked me that he stole Gerald's sunglasses at the start, for some reason it made me feel like he was just a Gerald clone, whereas their personalities are completely different looking back. Then, sometime after that, it's hard to say when, he really started to grow on me. Maybe it was around the time when he said he liked romantic era poetry, maybe it was when he said that thing about him literally ceasing to exist if his swag was removed. Definitely, by the time he got that bit with finding Lannette, he was one of my favourite characters. He just seemed like a genuinely nice person, although a bit self centered. About his actual death, I think it was very brave to not give him any final words or moments, and I think it worked, because it shows the finality of death, and seems more realistic. It was a particularly brave move, considering that this is by far the most important death of the comic so far, seeing as we only got to know the characters as well as we do now since about Marston's capture. Interesting fact, the current team hasn't changed for 148 pages, until now. Also interesting, seeing as Chester died at level 23, he only went up two levels as a Gloom, which took him 227 pages in comic. You've really been stretching it out.

Nonetheless, this was definitely my favourite chapter so far, although we lost possibly my favourite team member. YOLO, while it annoys me generally, is the perfect tribute to Chester. How long have you been planning that? Am I right in thinking you held off on having him say it at any point in the comic, just for this?