I am an aspiring graphic novelist and character designer.
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    Kazuki Takamura
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I posted the first chapter of the second volume of Osana: The Land of Greed. The reason I posted Chapter 6 instead of Chapter 2 so I can pique the curiosity of the reader and make them wonder what happened in the first volume. If you don't want to spoil it for yourself you can go to the following links to buy a paperback copy or an Ebook of Osana: The Land of Greed Vol. 1

Paperback: http://www.lulu.com/shop/kazuki-takamura/osana-the-land-of-greed-vol-1/paperback/pr oduct-21749618.html

Ebook: http://www.lulu.com/shop/kazuki-takamura/osana-the-land-of-greed-vol-1/ebook/produc t-21823117.html
I really like how you warped Tomi in the computer,the concept seems interesting. The fluctuating style shows you are growing as an artist so that's good. I personally like the pencil style better. One suggestion I would make is have Tomi be teleported in the computer first and after the first action scene then you should introduce how he got there. On a side note would you mind taking a look at my comic Osana: The Land of Greed? http://www.smackjeeves.com/comicprofile.php?id=142948
@MaryYana: Sorry about the mix up, I recently swapped the chapter you read at DA to Chapter 3. I have a new Chapter 1 (it was the old Chapter 2)so the reader the excitement of that chapter will draw them in more easily. Here's a link to the new Chapter 1: http://www.smackjeeves.com/comicprofile.php?id=142948
I like how you are introducing Eileen in this chapter and also like Amanda line about her having animals attached to her body.(suggestive theme;) ) I have one question though why does Amanda look older in the newer version of Chapter 1? On a unrelated note have you read my comic yet, it available here at SJ.
Hi this is Kazuki, I wanted to let you know that I switched the old chapter 1 with what would have been chapter 2, so the story can grab the reader more easily. If you interested you can check it out. Also I am sorry but I could find anywhere else to post this.
Hi this is Kazuki, I wanted to let you know that I switched the old chapter 1 with what would have been chapter 2, so the story can grab the reader more easily. If you interested you can check it out. Also I am sorry but I could find anywhere else to post this.
Revitalizing The Beginning
I decided the chapter 1 I had was good but someone suggested I should throw the audience into the story then introduce them to make the story more exciting. Without further a due here is how Osana: The Land of Greed really begins, enjoy.
I read the little bit of chapter 3 you provided I still think this story is interesting, the introduction of the evil new character sure to make things interesting. I wonder though, where did he contract this curse, you don't need to tell me because that would be a spoiler.
This story on the right track, cutting the mother off is a great way to create a sense of wonder about her message. I look forward to future updates on this comics. On a side note would you mind taking a lokk at my comic Osana: The Land of Greed?http://www.smackjeeves.com/comicprofile.php?id=142948
@mayshing: That's too bad, I hope it gets popular enough to have an anime one day. :)
@mayshing: I would like both if you don't mind.
I was wondering what is the status of the Edepth Angel anime? If its classified you have to tell, I am just asking out of curious. I think it would be a great anime. On a side note have you read my comic yet?
The story of Angel's grandma really deepens the relationship Lien has for the Angel of today. It is sad that Angel didn't have her own feelings for Lien, they have a deep connection and would make a great couple.
The story is getting interesting so far, the skeletons in everyone's closet is getting pulled out. I also like this flashback, it does a nice job showing Ko Lei and his father's relationship.
The gang war in the cyborg city really puts into perspective the struggles of daily life for cyborgs. I believe this is good because you get to see what type of people the pinnochio project will help.
Lien looks super mad in this picture, I like how well you captured that emotion.
I like how Angel is somewhat reintroducing human emotions to Lien, its heartfelt.
I liked the last chapter, it showed how Randy settled in to this new life of being a cyborg. It also gave the reader a look at how things work when the get a new cyborg. He seems like he needs alot of training before he is gets the hang of this.
@MaryYana: He sounds somewhat like me in real life, but I haven't met any pushy people. Besides stubborn characters like Amanda tend to make friends with secluded
characters like Jonathan. If their age gap wasn't as large as it is they could potential be a couple. ;)
I believe the last few pages did a great job showing Amanda compassion nature, even helping out Jonathan, who' s adult. So far, he seems like my favorite character so far. He's no touch policy does make for some funny moments. It also seems like Amanda is interacting more with Jonathan now, it maybe because he opened up to her as the three of them spent time together.