Comment on pg16 of Devil's Cake
azigay, 20 Nov 2009 10:35 am

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Ah!!! So adorable! Lovely lines as always. :)

Comment on pg12 of Devil's Cake
azigay, 10 Nov 2009 02:15 am

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I'm now waiting patiently for a conclusion. :)I like this sequence. But I'm really wondering who the nutcracker is. Who was she asking to save her at the beginning of the chapter?
Maybe the nutcracker is Zoshi but with misleading hair colour which will be altered when he transforms. Or maybe Kea already thwapted him in the head with her shoe. It's impossible to tell. But it's so nice to see her smile. I also like what you've done with her hair and face shape.

Comment on pg02 of Devil's Cake
azigay, 02 Oct 2009 04:46 pm

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I think you should definitely publish your story.

Though I have noticed, throughout the story, that many of your readers seem to think Kea is being overly dramatic. I mean he's been stalking her for months?, molested her (as another woman), invaded her space during every waking hour, and drove away any chance of getting a boy -friend or otherwise- and he has now followed her home and is screwing with her home life. She's definitely not overreacting.

When it's all in list form it seems like a huge deal. But, Kea very rarely lists all her complaints together.

So I'm kind of curious as to how you'll remedy this. How will you balance the remainder of the story line with the amount of angsting your readers seem to require for proper understanding?

Comment on pg 27 of Devil's Cake
azigay, 16 Sep 2009 06:07 pm

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Broccoli_Bandit, BTF is right, though I would to add that he also molested her in the bath and that he drove her crazy while she was trying to study = crazy stress.

Comment on pg24 of Devil's Cake
azigay, 06 Sep 2009 01:42 pm

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You know, I never notice the sparklies in the background but looking at it now they're pretty awesome. They really balance the page well.