LRR
August 10th, 2010
Wow, the cover looks great! I like the cover both for this and the one for chapter 1. The character pinup to the side on a white bg you decided to use is actually a nice visual way to break from the previous chapter, not too overbearing and tranquil :)
Love it! I'm somewhat saddened that you're taking a break for another project, but I'll be eagerly looking forward to when this comic continues. It's easily one of the most professional webcomics I have seen in a long time. Definitely worth the wait, and I'm happy you two chose to share it with SJ!
It was obviously one of those unpredictable crits from Gen 1 XD And Nidoran was injured/lower-levelled, maybe. Haha, just handwave it.

Geekery aside, I like the panel layout for this page. It's interesting-looking and flows really well.
LRR
July 22nd, 2010
Oh nevermind, update's happening anyway :D
That last panel is worth so much. Love it =D
It's love and hate with this page. I'm real proud of how it turned out, but at the same time, I know what's wrong with it too. I'm still new at digital art and it shows. But dang, I never thought I could do this a year ago haha.

*IF YOU'D LIKE to see what this page looks without text, visit my deviantART page:
http://sailingbreezes.deviantart.com/

Yes, that's the "mailman" in the bottom panel. I figured a page like this would be a good way to pass time in-comic.

Thanks for reading.
SO flipping cute :D
Oh goodness, I love the art of your comic SOSO MUCH. I also like this proposed raven "familiar," and I'm wondering if he'll turn up. =)
LRR
July 13th, 2010
Okay, and now I'm caught up! I think I understand what you mean now by wanting more/stronger inking. The way you ink is already very good (I'm jealous!), but what you're probably wanting is a better balance between ink and negative space, right? Correct me if I'm wrong, though.

A cartoonist to look at would be Jeff Smith, like his work with RASL: http://www.boneville.com/category/drawing-board/
The way he uses ink gives so much dimension to the
And it's not just ink, but also the way he handles scenes. On several pages, you could stand to vary the panels in a way that would allow you to strengthen the scenery and overall illustrations. This should help with the "white problem," without necessarily making the panels "less sparse." And given your high skill with inking and lines already, I don't think you'll have too much trouble with that. It might be a little more time consuming though =/

Good luck with the comic, and I'm definitely liking the story. I'll keep an eye on this one =)
LRR
July 13th, 2010
The inking and toning are so, so pretty for this page :)
LRR
July 13th, 2010
Ah, I should've read one page more! Now this makes sense :)
LRR
July 13th, 2010
Perspective doesn't look as bad as you might think, but the panels could be much busier to give a better impression that it's more noisy than the protagonist would like (unless it's part of his personality to think that such a street is "noisy," which I could see happening).

Anyway, I really like the pacing of this story, it's very laid-back and relaxed, even when it's actiony, haha :)
LRR
July 13th, 2010
Yeah, the flow of the action was actually pretty good, and I was entertained. In this page alone, the way you pulled back from the action as the dragon died gave a very powerful effect.
Like sIck said, adding some backgrounds will give the page the strongest improvement. You draw backgrounds well, and I know that the scenery has already been established, but the overwhelming whiteness of the make them appear weak.

Again, your action panels and scenes are fine :) I actually came to this comic because I noticed your post in the forum, where you mentioned that you didn't use enough ink and that your pages are too white. The inking itself looks fine, but the problem is that you don't have enough to ink, right? I'll keep reading and see what else I can comment on.
LRR
July 12th, 2010
And much later than I would've liked, here's page 3. There's things I like about this page and things I don't like (like my horrible misshapen speech bubbles, and the text suffered a lot too). Thicker ink seems to suit the comic's style better, so I'll try going back to that for the next few pages. Sorry for the delay, and thanks for reading.
LRR
July 8th, 2010
@ Dokidoki-rin: I normally use Staedtler sketch pens to outline all of my characters and page boxes, but on this page I also used colored gel pens to get the different colored outlines. Scenery, if it needs it, gets outlined in plain pencils.

I've never tried using watercolor pencil for outlining though; I'll probably give it a try now :)
Interested in this new hero. Looking forward to the next page :)
LRR
July 3rd, 2010
"Oh dear," indeed. What does it mean, I wonder? Can't wait to find out! :)
LRR
July 3rd, 2010
I love the b&w heavy inking in this comic. Differs from what I've seen in your Mokepon comic, but it looks great!
LRR
July 3rd, 2010
@WhitexNoise: Haha, true, true! I designed him to be a cute, younger mailman to better justify the clairvoyant's silly crush, so I hope he meets your expectations. :)

@tRickityHouses: Thank you!
LRR
July 3rd, 2010
@ Dokidoki-rin: Thank you all of your comments! I really appreciate you taking the time to look at my comic :)

@Sfingi: Thank you for the comment! I also appreciate the fact that you've taken the time to read through the comic, and I'm especially happy that you like it! I'm very happy to reach a wider audience than the typical teenage demographic that visits smackjeeves.

I have not experimented in marbleizing, but I read up on the technique, and I'd love to give it a try now that I know what it is. It looks very useful, and thank you so much for sharing. I appreciate your time.