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August 9th, 2017
Something tells me her sister is more capable than we think. It would be amusing, and somewhat satisfying, to Sito have his rear handed to him by Fiora's kid sister. Although it would feel like a pull out of nowhere since I can't recall any hints she would have those sorts of capabilities. There are things that need explaining, actively or passively, for the benefit of the readers or audience.
@Zimeta08: Well, he did craft her mind. I just realized some of the implications of that statement, but Otto is personally responsible for the bulk of what Blue's mind is like, the core bits anyway.
She's a sharp one
Looks like she's starting to have fun. But since this is a comic, chances are some time in the next five pages something is going to come along and ruin the good time.
@WakaXO: You're welcome. I suggest you proofread the words you plan to use in future pages or run them through a writing aid program, like Grammarly, to cut down on potential errors
"Marks" is plural, you need an apostrophe between the k and the s to make it possessive. Other than a few minor grammatical errors I'm finding the story interesting so far, just found the comic this morning.
Seems Blue is starting to show emotions, in particular, she has displayed loyalty, which someone could argue is just an attachment created through identifying Otto as her primary human; concern, once again someone could argue it's just coding; and compassion, caring about others that are not within her designated purview can't be as easily explained away.

I'm sure there are other emotions she's displayed, but the those are the three big ones I can see at the moment.
And to think, she's doing this at a handicap.
As the saying goes, "you will always be your own worst critic"
July 5th, 2017
And now, a philosophy lesson.
That would mean in our world they would have to be positioned in what we today refer to as border states. Amusingly enough the when the Confederate States were formed they were in direct violation of the constitution, there's actually a line in the US Constitution about an agreement to not form a governmental confederation.
We all have to have the illusion crushed at some point
Noticed a slight mistake, it's supposed to be 'two' not "too"

Other than that, nice to see a new page.
Just took another look at the prior page, I think I found the item he zeroed in on. Considering how innovative something like that is, I came out of it thinking it was priced kinda low. Keep in mind, this is still a rather costly item, what with being 450 grand (at least I surmise it's the item priced at that on the previous page) and all, but when I did that check my first thought was about wondering why there weren't more zeros on that item
June 15th, 2017
Normally a white background is a bad idea, mostly because of how bland and lazy they come off as. That said, with all the graphic imagery of some the prior pages it is nice to get a bland and seemingly uninspired background. It has a bit more thematic weight behind that way.
Hope all goes well for you. Guess we better get on that question thing so the Q&A feels worth it, I actually have a few questions.

What gave you the idea for the story? What was the inspiration for the races? What prompted you to make the main characters social oddities?
I see we're moving our focus away from Miss Wolfe for a bit. We already know the Panther is from South America. Jackals are native, and of cultural significance, to Egypt, so that means the Jackal is from Africa, would be kind of amusing to see where they're actually from. As for the Ram, I got nothing on where they could be from beyond maybe Europe
The bot that inspired, the bot he personally worked on, and the bot he did his best to heal. If you ask me, Otto might just be one of the most important people in the history of robotics.
@Chickeneverland: looks like you missed a word there
@Marshal Banana: Very true, the same can be said about Blessed with Suck