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In retrospect, I could have handled the transition of Lucy's clothes between the last two panels here better. She should have either started changing in one of the other panels.
I don't know if this will be totally confusing, or if it makes any sense. Often comics can be a puzzle.

If you notice on the other pages, Arim never hit anyone she was fighting. She dodged, tripped, blocked, and attempted to scare them away. The girls opinion that she wouldn't fight wasn't correct, but they were close to the truth.

In my original version, it was just going to step ahead, and the fight wouldn't be shown. You'd just see Arim broken up, and get an explanation. Arim would mention that she took a picture of the thief with her eyes, and she grabbed her necklace (which you notice in the panel where Zoe punches Arim).

Instead (because I'm trying to stick to 12 page chapters), there's just the fight, and I have her transmitting the picture as kind of a wrap up to the attempt to catch the thief. And you see Grace's necklace in Arim's hand in the last panel.

Last page of the chapter (although not the ending of any of these narratives). Next chapter is mostly about Annie's father, then all of these storylines kind of link together after that.
One page left to the chapter. I changed these two pages to show the fight instead of my original plans. I had intended to just jump ahead and then try to semi wrap up Arim's part in this in two pages, but I think it was going to be too rushed.
I don't know if this seems mean, but I thought it was something that would happen at some point. Mira is gone, so also there would be a kind of contest to replace her. Arim would be the first challenged to see if she was a threat.

Also Mira probably deserves some karma back at her, but it's hit Arim instead.

I thought the purpose of having Mira, Arim and Evilyn as kind of the bad-girl superheroes was to reform them over time. I first got rid of Mira for a while, so Arim and Evilyn would change while she was gone. Each of them has to have some kind of challenge to overcome related to their shortcomings.
Only a few pages left to this chapter.
I hope it won't be confusing about who was the one sleeping. I made her hair more realistic and less stylized, and she hasn't appeared in a long time.

I would have had someone say her name, but neither of these two characters met her before.
The last few pages I've been ending the pages with a semi-resolution, I wonder if I should instead be ending the page with a cliffhanger? Still five pages left to this chapter, so this isn't over yet.
The 250th page.
A little late. I'm not sure I'm happy with panel 4, it might have been better if you were seeing Arim from behind instead of in front of her.
I was going to have dream-Annie appear in all of the panels, but I thought I needed to have a policy for when she appeared or not.

I decided she should only appear in panels that are showing what Grace sees. Otherwise it might be more confusing that others don't see her.
My original plan was to have this dreamworld Pulse in her underwear assuming that would be what Grace might imagine. But she's only see Pulse in her outfit (without her helmet on), so that was the second idea.

But I thought a kind of sexy version of her outfit would be funny, it would kind of fit the original plan, and it would help if I ever had to have both the real Pulse and this dream Pulse together at once.
Mira and Arim always have very bright colorful clothing.
The start of chapter 18, "The Great Chase".
The end of chapter 17. Chapter 18 starts next week.
Maybe she's only neutral good?
Hopefully this isn't confusing that she changed back again. She'll probably change once each chapter or more until this is resolved in chapter 19ish.

I also slightly altered the dialog in the last two panels of the previous page.
Three pages left for the chapter. Bets on if she ends up stealing the item or not?
This wasn't my original plan for this page, but it made more sense compared to the rest of the story.
Half-way through the chapter.
It's a late update (updates should be on Thursday). They've been doing very loud construction work nearby and it's preventing me from sleeping normally.

I could have posted this last night, but I wanted to redraw the first panel.