Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

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Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

Postby kzuich » February 17th, 2018, 10:57 pm

Hello, everyone!

I'm hoping to get some feedback on my current comic, The Scientific Adventures of Pear

The first chapter, Chapter 00, was done back in 2012 as sort of a standalone episode- the art is a little bit rough ^^;
I've continued it since 2016, and am about 80 pages in right now.
I'm working toward publishing a printed version so I'd love to hear what people have to say about it!

Thanks a ton! :3
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Re: Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

Postby MK_Wizard » February 17th, 2018, 11:25 pm

I have seen the ad everywhere so I read it and fell in love. It's very cute and Pear is so endearing. I love the lighthearted feel of the comic.
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Re: Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

Postby kzuich » February 18th, 2018, 3:01 am

MK_Wizard wrote:I have seen the ad everywhere so I read it and fell in love. It's very cute and Pear is so endearing. I love the lighthearted feel of the comic.


Thank you so much! That means a lot to me- I really appreciate it!! ^^
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Re: Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

Postby Robobuddies » February 18th, 2018, 11:30 am

It's very cute! Though there are a few things that could use improvement.

For one thing, your posing is a little stiff. Like in the center panel here (http://scientificadventuresofpear.smack ... 3-page-01/) where the scientist is supposed to be jumping, but he looks like a cardboard cutout. To remedy this, I reccommend studying real-life poses. http://senshistock.deviantart.com is a great place to go for reference images, but just in general if you google "(insert expression here) pose reference" youll often end up with a wealth of useful stuff.

The panels could also use better flow/word bubble placement. Take careful care to pay attention to how you lead the readers eye around the page, and you can create some amazing effect. Here's a good article about it (http://makingcomics.spiltink.org/flow-the-eyelines/), and I also recommend watching the youtube video "The Genius of Dragonball" by SuperEyepatchWolf, as he touches on this topic briefly and has some very useful things to say about it.

The camera angles could also use some more flavor, but since this is a gag comic that's not something nearly as important as the other things I pointed out.

Apart from that, the comic is super cute and I'm really interested to see where the story goes!
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Re: Review Request: The Scientific Adventures of Pear

Postby kzuich » February 18th, 2018, 12:54 pm

Robobuddies wrote:It's very cute! Though there are a few things that could use improvement.

For one thing, your posing is a little stiff. Like in the center panel here (http://scientificadventuresofpear.smack ... 3-page-01/) where the scientist is supposed to be jumping, but he looks like a cardboard cutout. To remedy this, I reccommend studying real-life poses. http://senshistock.deviantart.com is a great place to go for reference images, but just in general if you google "(insert expression here) pose reference" youll often end up with a wealth of useful stuff.

The panels could also use better flow/word bubble placement. Take careful care to pay attention to how you lead the readers eye around the page, and you can create some amazing effect. Here's a good article about it (http://makingcomics.spiltink.org/flow-the-eyelines/), and I also recommend watching the youtube video "The Genius of Dragonball" by SuperEyepatchWolf, as he touches on this topic briefly and has some very useful things to say about it.

The camera angles could also use some more flavor, but since this is a gag comic that's not something nearly as important as the other things I pointed out.

Apart from that, the comic is super cute and I'm really interested to see where the story goes!


Thank you so much for your critique- it was very helpful! :3

I recently found Senshi Stock and combined with stuff I was picking up from Proko, it's been so useful in getting me out of my comfort zone with regards to posing and such ^^
And the making comics article was really interesting and in depth! Thank you for that!

I'm really glad you think it's cute and I appreciate you taking time to give specific critiques. :3
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