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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby walkin_talkin_apocolyps » August 31st, 2011, 2:58 pm

ummmm well i pretty sure ish just the programs fault but all yur lines look kinda jaggety >.,<
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby RTSSH21 » August 31st, 2011, 3:07 pm

Your buildings and most of your backgrounds look plastic or without life sometimes and your houses get a little odd on page 4. Some of them become white blobs while others still have distinctive roofs.



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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Nymine » August 31st, 2011, 7:38 pm

Hum well I got a little confused by how to read the floating text of panel 1 of your first chapter. I read it backwards first(that could just be me though).
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby SuperBiasedMan » August 31st, 2011, 7:52 pm

Nymine, your comic reads a little slow paced, moreso at the start. It might have to do with the fact that it's in a strip format rather than pages, but it takes a bit to really get going (I'm not sure at what rate these originally updated though, I assume it was 3 updates a week at most).
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby blankd » August 31st, 2011, 8:24 pm

The text can be very taxing to read at times since it's handwritten. Some more preplanning about how it's placed will either fix this issue or help minimize the issue.

(For some of how its drawn I get the feeling it was done completely in pen, I'm not sure so I'll refrain from commenting on it.)
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Monkipi » September 1st, 2011, 9:12 am

While it's generally fine, the red on blue sometimes creates a strange visual strain on the eyes, making it somewhat hard to read.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Nymine » September 1st, 2011, 11:02 am

Noses(noses are hard). You've almost got a horse-faced thing going on.

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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby eishiya » September 1st, 2011, 11:10 am

Scrapped Project: I dislike how the text looks so digital compared to the art. I think softening it a little so it's not so pixelly-looking and maybe lightening it so it's a dark grey rather than black would help.

Alternatively, you could look into hand-lettering. I think that could really work for the look for this comic. It's not easy to get into, but I think it's worth learning.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby avian-reader » September 1st, 2011, 11:21 am

At some point, your awesome comic is going to be really awkward to read because it will be full of sex :(
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby eishiya » September 1st, 2011, 11:39 am

(Only for 15-20 pages spread over 2 chapters!)

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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby FISHWHATERMELAN » September 1st, 2011, 12:03 pm

kinda shitty comic dude
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby MemaiShirosaki » September 1st, 2011, 12:05 pm

ED-style humor.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby eishiya » September 1st, 2011, 12:17 pm

Sometimes the page scans aren't cleaned very well and have smudgy bits, presumably from erased pencil. Some pages are also tilted during scanning. I think these distract from the otherwise clean and wonderful ink work. I wish you'd put more care into the postproduction.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Guest » September 1st, 2011, 12:25 pm

I don't like how the characters remind me of Harry Potter guys (one looks like Snape) xD
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby ApaFox » September 1st, 2011, 8:15 pm

Trust me when I say that I defiantly have no problem with your comic content, but I've never seen Linebeck as a "love interest" kind of person.
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