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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Monkipi » August 29th, 2011, 8:40 pm

[quote=Ddraigeneth]Monkipi - The banner is very stretched/squished. I would've said the art needed some general cleaning up, but the more recent pages are actually looking pretty decent.[/quote]
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I dislike that at one point it goes from pencil to color.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby blankd » August 29th, 2011, 9:44 pm

Sometimes it feels like the absolute white/black in the smaller panels are used to get around drawing actual backgrounds. The faces could also use more variety.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby eishiya » August 29th, 2011, 9:49 pm

There are a lot of characters, many of which seem to have the same level of importance. Because of this and the fact that the story is largely character-driven, it's very difficult to keep track of the characters. On top of that, most things are implied rather than explained, which is something I normally love, but combined with the sheer volume of material, it just makes things confusing.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby walkin_talkin_apocolyps » August 29th, 2011, 9:54 pm

i been really scared to post here >.,< BUT i guess i should figure out the cruddy stuff now insteada later....

OKIE DOKE the only thing i think i dunt like about yur comic is that it seems kinda too grownup for me >.,< hm..... mebbe it also looks too clean.... like most of yur drawings are mostly outlines and not so much line detail P: but it doesnt look bad!
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Monkipi » August 29th, 2011, 10:21 pm

blankd wrote:Sometimes it feels like the absolute white/black in the smaller panels are used to get around drawing actual backgrounds. The faces could also use more variety.

I will absolutely admit to that being the case in places. Especially around page ten-25 or so. About faces, you mean structure and shape, yeah?


@ Walkin talkin apocolypse: your poses are a tad stiff, the rest looks nice.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Guest » August 29th, 2011, 10:47 pm

In the early comics, It was hard to follow...

Plus, he got hurt by a wallet. Pussy.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Guest » August 29th, 2011, 10:49 pm

I don't know which comics you did compared to someone else. :(
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby walkin_talkin_apocolyps » August 30th, 2011, 1:24 pm

umm.... the lines look a wee bit messy.... it could just be the pen tho. try usin microns! they're magically delicious! <3
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby ApaFox » August 30th, 2011, 1:30 pm

Too short, need more data.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Guest » August 30th, 2011, 6:41 pm

Your CSS is kinda messy. You should try to improve in backgrounds, and make different kind of pannels, not all squares! ^^
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Guest » August 30th, 2011, 6:42 pm

I know little of Zelda, but the cover uses some awfully bright colors and the pages seem almost one shade of gray.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby H0lyhandgrenade » August 30th, 2011, 8:45 pm

I think the inking could do with a lil' more linewidth variation.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby eishiya » August 30th, 2011, 8:50 pm

I don't really like the lettering. I admire that it's hand-done, and it's great practice, but at this stage it doesn't look quite right. It's a little too messy and doesn't flow very well; many of the letetrs are jumbled together and are difficult to read. With more practice I'm sure it'll be lovely.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby Monkipi » August 30th, 2011, 9:37 pm

I don't like that there seems to be a disproportionate amount of shading being used to define the noses. It makes it look too out of place on the face, I think either slightly reducing that, or upping the detail in the shading around the lips and eyes would go a long way.
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Re: Something you dislike about the above SJer's comic

Postby RTSSH21 » August 30th, 2011, 10:25 pm

There doesn't seem to be enough body to the heads. The anatomy is just weird, and it probably would look better with some tones. It doesn't feel like it suits the comic to just have black and white.
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